Please complete one worksheet for each paper in your group. Each peer in will have a worksheet from every member of the group, and will hand in the worksheet with the final draft.

Your Name:

Peer’s Name:

Pre-reading Assignment: What does the peer most like about the draft? What does the peer think he or she needs to work on most? (Use the peer’s own assessment to help you decide how to focus your energies in #3

Read the O.S. through one time in a casual way. This will give you a sense of what is in the paper. Then complete this worksheet more carefully.

1) Number each paragraph (1,2,3, etc) and make a list of the themes the author includes in the paper. For each theme, the author should be working with at least two sources. (Is he/she?)

2) Look at the first sentence in each body paragraph (the paragraphs that are not the introduction or conclusion). Does the author clearly identify the theme in this “topic sentence” for each paragraph? Write a specific suggestion for each of these topic sentences. Mark those suggestions on the peer’s draft.

3) In each body paragraph, look at the work with text. On the back of this worksheet, make at least 3 specific suggestions for changes to the work with text in the draft O.S.
a. Do you see quotes that don’t seem quite right for the “theme” in the paragraph? Where? (What would you substitute as a passage?)
b. Look at the use of paraphrase. Does the peer put the specific passage in his/her own words? Where the paraphrase uses “key words or phrases,” does the author use quotation marks? Are the paraphrases cited in the text (page numbers at a minimum)?
c. Do we have effective use of examples as part of an “inverted pyramid” that Ballenger discusses?
d. Where might the peer improve the synthesis by being more careful to use the loop and/or inverted pyramid more effectively?
e. Where does the peer do an especially good job of explaining how the quotes/paraphrases reveal something about the theme? (Why is this so effective?) Where does the author need to do a better job making clear just how the work with text reveals something about the theme?